Guild Wars 2

In an effort to consume this entire work from start to finish in one sitting (a lengthy endeavor to be sure), some of you have requested to be advised when the Forsaken Soul: A Path to Enlightenment Project is complete. That time is now; you can review it in its entirety here:

https://forum-en.gw2archive.eu/forum/community/creations/FanFic-Forsaken-Soul-A-Path-to-Enlightenment/first#post4559076

For those of you who choose to read the 20+ chapters, could you take a minute to post below and tell me what you think. I will offer a few possible options to choose from:

Option 1) Total waste of my time. That was the most terribly written story I have ever read.
Option 2) Amateurish and uninspiring. Don’t quit your day job.
Option 3) Meh. It was Ok but maybe you should spend your time in-game instead.
Option 4) That was pretty darn impressive. I very much enjoyed it indeed.
Option 5) Just plain Wow! Move over M. Night Shyamalan, there’s a new Sheriff in town.

On a forum where opinions are like Scarlet’s minions, never-ending, I am not sure what to make of this post being read 192 times and 0 responses.

• Is it because nobody read the story and therefore can’t comment?
• Is it because it was so awful that nobody has the heart to tell me?
• Or was it just so bad that people hope I just go away?

Just looking for a wee bit of feedback here folks… ANY constructive feedback.

I remember reading Chapter 4 when you first posted it and I enjoyed it. Skimming through it just now I found a typo:

Running my hands across my skull yields neither bump, nor bruise.

I’d recommend having someone look it over if you haven’t already, but the voice you use is unique and interesting and I’d say it’s worth a read.

Yes, I guess ‘Running my hands across my oar yields neither bump nor bruise.’, doesn’t make as much sense as my head does it? Bad Word Spellchecker bad.

Thank you, I have made the change.

Hopefully you will have opportunity to enjoy the rest of the story when you have time.

I have not been on these forums for very long so I am not sure why people are not commenting on the Forsaken Soul story.

I read the entire thing from the first chapter to the epilogue and I can honestly say I found the story to be simply wonderful. For an amateur writer you are very polished. I have read a bunch of fanfic stuff in the past and it usually comes off lacking. However, this story from the first chapter grabbed me by the hand and pulled me straight into the jungle with the main character. The symbolism is colorful and perfectly descriptive. Your wordplay is certainly beyond reproach and your fluent use of diction is astounding. Punctuation was the one thing that could use a little bit of work but it was not that bad. A proofreader might help you out there.

The ending was quite the surprise, though it left me wanting more. I wonder, is that really the end? As a storyteller you are fabulous and I thank you for allowing me to experience your work.

Well thank you Dolphin that is a positively glowing critique.

I am glad you found it so enjoyable. This was my first attempt to write a piece of fiction more than a page or two long, so this 10k word story was quite the challenge for a non-writer like me.

As for your question “is that really the end”, I wrote the rough version of the final chapter somewhere between chapter 4 and 5 so the last chapter’s ending was, as intended.

I will keep an eye on this thread. If I should see requests from readers for more, then we shall see. At this point the response has been somewhat sparse, if that should change, so might my consideration for continuation. So I leave it entirely up to you dear readers.

Edited for spelling

I rarely comment on community creations, as i tend to judge them with the same standards i would expect from professional work, i most of the time do not engage in criticism (would it be positive or negative) on creations that didn’t make me feel something or moved me.

Now to the point of Forsaken Soul,
be it the wording, the tone that derive from all too serious clichés as well as the too obvious jokes, or the choice of subject and drive, i can only praise this particular creation.

Yalora, i think you’ve done a great job of writing a light mood yet adult story, with tension building and a final that doesn’t disappoint.
As a reader of all 3 official books, that are, from a writing perspective, quite… garbage honestly, i could only hope for one full novel in the Guild Wars universe written by you some day.

Thank you so much for sharing this creative writing with us !

Well thank you for taking the time to offer up your most gracious thoughts. I certainly appreciate such high praise and am oh so glad you liked the story.

I think you hit pretty close to the mark with your “light mood yet adult story”. I was in fact trying to take a serious and somewhat mysterious subject and attempt to tell it in a lighter slightly introspective narrative. I did have some concern that my chosen vocabulary might be a bit intimidating to a younger reader. Hopefully that was not the case.

As for writing a full official Guild Wars novel, well… I will leave that ball in ANet’s court but I can truthfully say at this time, I am not currently under or negotiating a NDA.

I will continue to keep an eye on this thread should anyone else care to voice their comments.