You can disagree all you want, but it’s still exposition. Read those lines again, neither of them is “formulating a plan of action”. This first line even contains material that should be GLARINGLY OBVIOUS to both characters involved, yet Sieran still feels the need to say it. Poor poor writing and a classic example of “idiot lecture”. It’s also redundant with what’s happening visually. But like I said earlier, if you’re unclear about what is and what isn’t exposition then we’re very clearly talking at two different levels here and it would be a waste to continue.
It may be obvious but like I said in my previous version it was still necessary for co-ordination sake. Imagine if Sieran just fell back without saying anything, even you as a player what would you have done? backed her up?, kept going without a care? ask everyone to join you in the line of defense? without Sieran explaining what she planned to do and just doing it, it would have caused complete mayhem. It was a plan.
In anycase both lines were detailing events in the future (what would happen once they boarded the ships) Exposition doesnt deal with future events so no it is definitely not exposition.
Like I said earlier, we’re clearly talking at two different levels and continuing this discussion is a waste if you can’t recognize what is and is not exposition.
2. You responded to my post, which was a response to someone claiming it wasn’t exposition. I’m not sure what you were trying to achieve but jumping into an argument and taking neither side.
This is a forum. I’m allowed to do that, especially when I have a point to make.
3. Idiot lecture isn’t a derogatory term, it’s an actual literary device where things that should be blatantly obvious to the characters are being stated solely for the audience, usually due to a perception that the audience isn’t sharp enough to pick up on these pieces of the story. Kind of like a character referring to his wife as “wife” and not by her name, just so the audience knows the relationship, although it’s highly unrealistic dialog (this being one of the classic examples).
Yeah, right about here I’m going to call you out. You need to try writing dialogue which sounds natural and not artificial, or forced. I had to do it as part of a creative writing class, and you know what came out all around the room from the exercise? Things which were really, really hard to use in a scene.
Dialogue is a tricky beast to write well. I see otherwise good writers fail at it, or alternatively writers which make dialogue sound good fail to have the rest of the writing work as well. It’s the #1 thing I hate to do when writing, and rough drafts have . . . by necessity . . . had the dialogue reworked to be more artificial so a scene could be understood by someone other than the person who wrote it.
But see, here’s the thing…I don’t claim to be a professional writer. Just as someone doesn’t need to be a professional quarterback to recognize a bad pass, you don’t need to be a professional writer to recognize bad writing. Are you trying to claim someone must be an excellent writer in order to recognize bad writing? That would be a logical fallacy sir.
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